Jasmine Hart

I liked this. It made me smile. I think that the last line needs to be a syllable longer though. Maybe try saying "rather" instead of "quite", as that should ...

Little pink roses enchanted my eyes, Mouths perfectly formed, their necks stretched in hope, Convinced that they could reach the oak tree's highs Despite each turn of the kaleidoscope. But ...

Em...I think that's a link...(I hope!). There's like nothing in my portfolio...should probably do something about that...

It's a lovely idea, but Kit has a point about the whole cost issue, and I'm not sure how crazy my parents would be about the idea...of course, I could ...

Wow.Just give me a moment to get over the sheer brilliance of this, then I might actually be able to say something constructive... Ok. I'd take out "I am right, ...

This is nice, but I think that it could be more poweful towards the end. I couldn't really feel the affect which this fella had on the speaker, and I'd ...

I agree that this is simple, and I do think that it coudl be interesting to try this from a new angle, using more imagery and trying ot convey your ...

I'd try this again, without the rhyme, and see what happens, because I think that you're getting very restricted by, and, as has been pointed out, some of it is ...

Thank you! :D

Yay!That's great! I'm so in awe of people who can plot things out. I tend ot make things up as I go...

Ok, I know nothing about art, so my opinion isn't really worth anything, but I thought that this was really magical. I loved the sky and the sea.

Pen, usually black, with a special pen for final drafts.Yesterday though, I went from black to pink, because my story and I were being cranky with each other.The pinkness helped ...

'Cause if I stop, I'll glad other people feel this and I'm not a looper.I just feel all panicky and tense if I don't.It's just something that needs to be ...

You don't know, Kit? I'd say plot is your greatest strength, with language being a close second. Tough call, though.This is hard...

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